I like the idea and I would use this! I like how your elevator pitch was organized and it painted a clear picture of what you were offering to your customers. One thing I would work on is where your eyes are focused when giving the pitch and making sure the camera shows your full body. I don't feel thats really important the camera position but I know some professors want to see body language as well.
Like Tim said, the content of your pitch seemed solid—you know what it is that you're trying to sell, and what the application should do. The one thing to work on for next time, in my opinion, would be your delivery. Along with the points that Tim touched on, try to smooth out your dialogue and remove some of the extra "umm's" and such. I have the same problem when I have to give a speech or complete an assignment like this, but its an issue that can easily be ironed out.
Kyle, I feel like you have a great understanding of your concept. You have a clear way of speaking and like most of us, you use umm too much for a pitch. Like Alejandro said all you need is a little more practice. I might have even used umm in my pitch so I probably need to practice more too. One final recommendation I have is to put on a button down shirt or a suit it is up to you. Incorporate our suggestions and your third pitch will be awesome, good luck.
Kyle,
ReplyDeleteI like the idea and I would use this! I like how your elevator pitch was organized and it painted a clear picture of what you were offering to your customers. One thing I would work on is where your eyes are focused when giving the pitch and making sure the camera shows your full body. I don't feel thats really important the camera position but I know some professors want to see body language as well.
Hey Kyle,
ReplyDeleteLike Tim said, the content of your pitch seemed solid—you know what it is that you're trying to sell, and what the application should do. The one thing to work on for next time, in my opinion, would be your delivery. Along with the points that Tim touched on, try to smooth out your dialogue and remove some of the extra "umm's" and such. I have the same problem when I have to give a speech or complete an assignment like this, but its an issue that can easily be ironed out.
Kyle,
ReplyDeleteI feel like you have a great understanding of your concept. You have a clear way of speaking and like most of us, you use umm too much for a pitch. Like Alejandro said all you need is a little more practice. I might have even used umm in my pitch so I probably need to practice more too. One final recommendation I have is to put on a button down shirt or a suit it is up to you. Incorporate our suggestions and your third pitch will be awesome, good luck.